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In my sleep I dream of bright days,
the sun touched my skin.
In deserts and memories,
and sand laced with thoughts and voices.
I still have the smell of the wind in my nose.
All the holding of time in my hands,
melting through my chalky fingers,
to my tired feet,
and rotting away.
Facing the spiraling sky,
reaching it's fingers into my mind,
uprooting my feet,
and pulling to the surface of my skin,
the memories,
of every forced goodbye.
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Just a dream I had.
I used to live in a desert.
I often dream of the sun, sand and wind and the way it smelled.

I might scrap this one. I don't normally write in this style.
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:iconl0ne-w0lf:
Lovely piece. Reminded me of some Sisters of Mercy.

Why don't you normally write in this style?
I think you did wonderful.
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*static--death Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I suppose I feel like it's too scattered for my liking. I like to rhyme because it's more of a tightly knit format, but it's refreshing to do this so perhaps I shall. :D
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*DancesWithSadows Jan 2, 2013   General Artist
Really love what you did with this. Trying to find a specific line to point out but I just love it all. Great job.
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*static--death Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you very much, that makes me feel a lot better about this poem. :aww:
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:iconskull-king:
Don't scrap it. It's emotion, it's presence of sense of self. Free verse is beautiful.
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*static--death Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Okay, I won't.... THIS TIME....

Thank you my friend. :aww:
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:iconskull-king:
Good! I'd have to fly to BFE and kick your ass.
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*static--death Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Bahaha, most definitely.
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